Please compare Letter A with Letter B, and comment...
Please compare Letter A with Letter B, and comment on both of them. Then, revise your favorite one for effectiveness. Add any information if necessary. Letter A Dear Mr. Andrew Roach Thank you for your interest in our new products. We expect we will be able to let you have some bears if you can tell us how many you want. We will require at least 50% payment in advance and the rest within 30 days of delivery. Will this be okay with you? We look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely Chris Masters Letter B Dear Mr. Andrew Roach Thank you for your interest in our exciting new product. We are sure that Tom Teddy Bear will prove to be a huge success in Spain. Perhaps you could let us have some idea of the stocks you would be able to hold at any one time and what quantity you expect to be able to sell in the first year. Please note that we require 50% payment in advance, for your first order, the remaining 50% payable 30 days after delivery. Future orders are subject to our normal credit terms. We are sending you sample of Tom Teddy Bear, so that you can investigate the market further. Yours sincerely Susanna Wang